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Will you still push me on the swing
In the park where we used to play
While we sat and talked of nothing,
Until our hair turns gray?

Will we share the hour long phone calls
Filled with laughter, filled with tears,
And will we carry all we are
And cherish it through the years?

Remember when we promised
How we'd be there for each other?
Through good, through, bad, through all we had
Through love for one another?

I've been there through your first break-up
And you were there for mine...
Remember how we spent our time
Together, both of us crying?

And how we'd shrug and laugh it off
"Ah, who needs love?" we'd say
A love could not change what we had
We were still there the next day

But remember the time it did get in the way?
And how we always fought?
But we made a truce that if one couldn't have them,
Then neither of us would not

We both have met our mothers
And seen how scary they can be...
Remember that time...or was it two?
When she grounded you from me?

And you were mad, and I was mad
And we talked nonetheless...
It's funny how we always broke the rules
Just for each others' happiness...

We were rebels, you and I
Though I still jokingly curse your name
You always got us into trouble,
I always was to blame...

...we're young now, but have you ever thought
Will it be this way when we're older?
And our worlds grow farther and farther apart,
And this world becomes even colder?

Will I still sit at your front row,
Will I give you away?
When I have to let you go
On your beautiful wedding day?

And when I have my first born child
Will you be there then?
Looking in their eyes knowing
They carry the name of my best friend...

We're still planning on going here, right?
And we're still going to live there?
...let us cherish the time, and do everything
And let's go everywhere...

We made ourselves into who we are
It has always been you and me
So take my hand and let us go
Let us be set free...

...together...
©2005-2009 =AiShindou
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Author's Comments

a poem in loving dedication to my dearest ~ShadowOfTheDeity
You are my best friend, and I hope we stay that way. You are down, but I'm here for you to lift you back up.

-Artist's Notes-
This is easily one of the longest and most heartfelt poems I have ever made. It is really based of a lot of real life stuff, which is another reason why I love it so much. Really though...I don't like the way it rhymes; I wanted to put it in Open, but somehow, I got it to rhyme. But it's so much more of a dialogue than just a poem if you read it the right way. The poem itself sucks, but the message is clear. Hope you enjoy it.

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:iconwijnha01:
Made me wanna go home and hug my own girl :)
The only thing that irked me was that the word 'though' got mispelled pretty often o.O

nice work though :D

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A sleep inducing kick to the head would be a well earned reward...
:iconfsmbabe:
This is lovely. Made me smile lots. A lovely poem, really lovely!

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Help me, comfort me, stop me from feeling what i'm feeling now ~ Silverchair

I'm waiting for tonight, then waiting for tomorrow, and i'm somewhere in between, what is real and just a dream ~ Lifehouse
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really?? omg i'll change that now..

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:iconmy-eternal-memories:
that's so beautiful, Me-chan deserves it too, she's a great person, I've learned from the talks I've had with her. She will be greatly honored by this, I know it ^^. You did a great job...simple...but so very heartfelt, you outdid yourself emotionally on this. Great job hun.

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Tears fall...even when hidden by the most radiant smile...the tears still fall... :blackrose:
:iconarmageddon3k:
awww :aww: so full of feelings of the past, present and future... it really reaches out ;)

Nice work :P
:iconshadowofthedeity:
Ai...omg...it made me cry. It honestly made me cry. *hugs* It's beautiful.

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.::Like a Game of Pick-Up Sticks, Played by Fucking Lunatics::.
:iconai-kitsune:
I love this. It's so sweet and heartfelt. It actually made me kind of jealous, to tell the truth, even though I have a couple of friendships that are about that strong (CoughcoughMy-Eternal-Memoriescough). And the CG pic is just adorable! I give this an absolute 10 out of 10 for tearjerking sincerity and the heart to display it here on DA, because I know I would never have the latter of those two qualities.
:iconsada-chan:
Oooooooooooooh!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:heart: That is so sweet Shindou-Sama! It really makes the reader feel you emotions twards her! Very very well done. So full of love!

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"At times, people loose their courage to live. But... if in their hearts there is something they believe in, their courage will never truly disappear."
- Tsubasa Chronicles, Episode 8
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see? i'm not a complete and total perverted jerk now, am i?

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:iconaishindou:
awww, thank you so much :cuddle: i really was trying to pour my heart out, though I hate it when i get all emotional:blush:

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